in class writing

What did you change from yesterday and today?

I changed my thesis for draft three. At first my thesis was too generous. Then I decided to add more details. Besides that, I separated paragraph 2 into two different independent paragraph.Since I think I might be need wrire one more expample to support my topic sentences.

What is the effect? 

Effect: 

1. More details 

2. Sentences are clear,not confusing.
3.more logical