Blog 6

I still remember that in the begging of this term, I made a goal for myself. Actually, in that time, I was so confused. Yes, I can’t understand why we need to make a goal for ourself, for writing class?To be honest, in my opinions, writing just means writing, just like “putting pen to paper” or “typing ideas into a computer.” Which means we just needed to writing essay, paper…nothing fun, nothing interesting, nothing excited. It’s really a boring stuff. So, I wrote down some boring goal; just common mistake, like grammar mistakes,spelling wrong or something like I wanted to  improve my writing skills. 

However, I don’t know why these days when I go to bed, I was thinking about the question like that “What makes good writing?” or “What makes someone a good writer?” Actually, I felt so surprise about that, because I never thinking about the academic question when I go to bed. True! 

Finally, I got a result. I think writing is like a liner.

 Why I say that? In order to communicate effectively, we need to order our words and ideas on the page in ways that make sense to a reader. Like I mentioned in blog 5. Sometimes, when I was writing my own essays, I may not be able to catch the mistakes that are obvious to other readers. Also, since I had the tendency to revise my writing several times, I may thought a section was perfect when in actuality it does not flow with the rest of the essay. Which means what may make sense to me may not necessarily make sense for someone else.  

As we’ve all experienced, our ideas do not necessarily arise in a linear form. We may have a scattering of related ideas, a hunch that something feels true, or some other sense that an idea is “right” before we have worked out the details. It is often through the act of writing that we begin to create the logical relationships that develop the idea into something that someone else may receive and perhaps find interesting. The process of putting ideas into words and arranging them for a reader helps us to see, create, and explore new connections. So not only does a writer need to “have” ideas, but the writer also has to put them in linear form, to “write” them for a reader, in order for those ideas to be meaningful. As a result, when we are writing, we often try to immediately fit our choices into linear structures.

To be honest, I was not good at writing. I still have many different kind of problems when I was writing. But, with the continues practicing, I found that I improved a lot. At least, I felt more confident than before. In the entire day, I think I may need to make a new goal for myself. Which is write a good essay, not just write a essay.  

Finally, I hope I could improve my writing skills and achieve my goal in the end of this year.  

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( By the way, I really like your teaching style, it was really interesting and I learnt a lot in your class. Thank you for your patient.)

Comma splices handout

Comma splices

                                   （Handout)

*What is Comma splices?
A comma splice is a grammatical error that occurs when two complete thoughts are separated only by a comma.

• A complete thought may also be called an independent clause or a complete sentence.

• A comma is not strong enough to separate two different ideas( sentences, complete thoughts, independent clauses)

*How do we fix this type of error?

3 ways to fix it !!!!!!!!!

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Strategy 1 — Make two complete sentences.

Example:

Grandma still rides her Harley motorcycle her toy poodle balances in a basket between the handlebars.

A break should occur between motorcycle and her. To fix the problem with Strategy 1, you would revise the sentence like this:

Grandma still rides her Harley motorcycle. Her toy poodle balances in a basket between the handlebars.

Strategy 2 — Use a comma and a coordinating conjunction.

There are seven coordinating conjunctions. Some people remember the seven by learning the word fanboys. Each of the seven letters of fanboys stands for one of the coordinating conjunctions.

F = for; A = and; N = nor; B = but; O = or; Y = yet; S = so

Teamed up with a comma, these seven coordinating conjunctions can correctly join two main clauses. Take a look at our original example:

Example:

Grandma still rides her Harley motorcycle her toy poodle balances in a basket between the handlebars.

To fix the problem with Strategy 2, you should do this:

Grandma still rides her Harley motorcycle, and her toy poodle balances in a basket between the handlebars.

*The important thing to remember with Strategy 2 is that you must use a coordinating conjunction that logically joins the two complete sentences. The coordinating conjunction but, for example, wouldn't work in the example above because the writer isn't showing contrast.

Strategy 3 — Use a semicolon.

Unlike a comma, a semicolon is a strong enough mark of punctuation to join two main clauses. Use a semicolon like this:

Grandma still rides her Harley motorcycle; her toy poodle balances in a basket between the handlebars.

Keep these three things in mind when you use a semicolon:

▪ The two main clauses that the semicolon joins should be closely related in meaning.

▪ Don't capitalize the word that follows the semicolon unless that word is a proper noun, one that is always capitalized.

▪ Limit your use of semicolons; you should not wantonly scatter them throughout your writing. Semicolons are like glasses of champagne; save them for special occasions.

Let’s Review:

1. use a Period to separate the sentences and capitalize the first letter of the second independent clause.
2. add a coordinating conjunction (FANBOYS) after the comma. 

For

and 

nor 

but 

or 

yet

so

1. place a semicolon(;)between the two complete thoughts.

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If you got that= A+, IF YOU DIDN’T GET IT, FAIL!

Go abroad= nature+appreciate+independent

      Do you have your own significant moment? What essential moment impressed you the most? 

      For me, a significant moment is a time that lingers on my heart forever and teaches me a lesson worthy to remember for a lifetime. I have experienced some times in my past 18 years; such as the first time I walked or the first time I learnt how to use make up…but leaving my family to America for studying is the one that impacted me most. Just because this unusual experience, I became more nature and appreciate home.

     I will never forget that day, September 4th, was cloudy. The sun was not embracing the earth yet while I was facing the farewell.

It was 3 o'clock; my relatives were crowded in my room, coming to say goodbye with their best wishes. I recalled my uncles' and aunts' words that taking care of myself, and their orders "Jennifer,whenever you have time do not forget to phone us". My Mum and grandmother were packing my stuffs, medicines needed, clothes needed, food needed, as if they wanted to pack all my stuffs in just one luggage. When the clock rang at 5 o'clock,  I realized how time flies for the very first time. It was the time to actually leave my families, relatives for a period.  I knew my grandmother must have tears in her eyes, because even when I had a trip for a week, she would be sensitive. As long as I think of this, I felt a sorrow in my inner hear. Finally, I had a last farewell with them, and got in the car with the company of my Mum and Daddy. 

     We left for PuDong International Airport, My Mum and Daddy kept talking all the way, but their words all centered on how to take care of myself or be relaxed but meanwhile study hard. However, my mind gradually went empty, and my ears cannot hear what my Mum and Daddy were saying. I just sat and stared out of the window, thinking what a nice city was, but I was leaving. I wanted to look hard for the sceneries and had them engraved in my mind. I was haunted by the smells coming from food, I would miss the food in this city, desserts, dishes, and all kinds of food l like. It was until leaving that i miss more of what I had in this city, where I born and lived for 18 years. Suddenly, I felt someone was grabbing me and I came back from my subconscious, awarding that we are on the high-way now. My Mum grabbed me because their with a turn in the road, she was afraid my body would move with the turn. Once again, I sense how carefully my parents treat me, not a little hurt would they let me have. My Mum started talking about one timeI got a burn when I was serving the food, and once I tumbled by my high heeled shoes when walking, and urged me again and again that the most important thing of studying abroad was avoiding hurt myself by accident. Listening to their words, we arrived at the airport.

      My father helped me bring 2 heavy luggages to have check-in baggage, and then the check in boarding procedure. I followed him and watched. It will be the last time my father helped me doing this. From this time on, I must do these by myself, I must get used to this.

      All the procedure done, I got my boarding check. I was not happy to see this card for the first time, I used to be very fresh when I have the boarding check, because was going to a new place to taste new culture. However, this time, this card was claiming that I would leave my parents official for at least months. "Hey, Jennifer"My father called me,"Here is the information of JFK, here is the map of New York City, and here is the telephone number of the driver who will pick you up." I was moved again; however these I always thought was necessary for my parents to do in the past. Now, I feel these were not.

      We come to the security check, it was like the border line.The moment I stepped into the line, I was leaving my parents, because they were not allowed to pass through this. My Mum hugged me and said"Go, and must must must look after yourself, phone Mum and Dad every day, tell us how you live each day". Tears falling off her eyes, I moved my sight to Daddy. He was a tough man who seldom cries, but I saw he had tears in eyes. I wanted to cry very much, but I know I can't, I must hold back my tears, or we three will cry harder. I squeezed a smile and promised them I would look after myself, eat well, study hard and phone them everyday. Then I across that "border line", not looking back. 

       As soon as I passed through the security check, I burst into tears. I kept thinking of my Mum, Daddy, and grandmother. I cannot help but thinking how nice it was in my hometown. When I fell ill, my Mum would take care of me, when I wanted to travel, my father would arrange everything and go with me, when I desired a new dress, my grandmother would  instantly buy it for me, when I...Suddenly, I had a passion that give up the chance to study abroad.The only thing I want was stay with my families, even they will sometimes scold me, but now a scold will be a luxurious thing. It was the moment that I realized how willfulI was in the past. I give up the intention to stay here, I shall go to America and learn how to become a independent girl even it was such a painful thing to leave.

         Now, I studied in Cheshire academy,which is a boarding school in America. But I am a day student. I lived with my host parents. They are all nice people and treat me like their own daughter. Sometimes, they are very busy on the weekend. That’s actually was a big trouble for me. I am the only kid in my family. When I was in China. My parents will do all the stuff for me. I don’t need to do any housework. I do not know how to washed my clothes; I do not know how to communicate with someone I didn't familiar with; I don't know how to distribute my time,I even didn’t know how to sweep the floor.....Yes, you may ask me that those all are the basic skills, how can you don't know how to do it? If without that, how difficult you are? Yes,It was a hard time for me. But when came to America, no body will help me to do this or that. Everything was changed. let’s take a example. My host parents were go to the christ church every Sunday. They went out at 8:00 in the morning and came back at 3:00 in the afternoon. Which means I need prepped my food for myself. In the begging, I was so confused and worried. Since I don’t know anything about cooking. I looked the microwave and found the food in the refrigerator.Actually, I found a pieces of salmon. But I really didn’t know how to cook it. Finally, I was give up. I found apples and carrots in the food conner. Yes, That’s my breakfast and lunch. I still remember that how hunger I am at that time. After that, I decided to learn became independent. My host mom spent whole weekend to teach me how to cook, like how to set up the time on the microwave and how to heat the toast. Also, she told me how to iron the clothes. I do those housework almost one years. Now, That’s “difficult” housework it was nothing to shout about. It was really a piece of cake. Actually, I was very precious for this experience. I was totally different from before. In the past, I was a spoiled girl. But now, I can do all the housework. To sum up, If without this experience, I may never became independence girl.

          Last but not least,this significant moment helped me to know how important family is. I learnt a lot from this experience, and I also reflected in my daily life. Few days ago, It's my father's birthday.I spent three hours to make a PowerPoint to him. I putted hundred photos in the video and sensed to him. If in the past, I may just sensed a message to him,or even forgot the dates. However, until I realize how important family is, I was try my best and show my love to my family members. To be honest, that's really was a good things for me and my families. I found we are getting much closer now. I missed them so much and understand how precious they are.They are like wind in the summer, giving me cool; they are like fire in the winter, giving me warm. They treat their children with our precondition. I will cherish every moment staying with them, love them, and it will also be my turn to take care of them.

What is the hardest part of this paper for you and why?

      For this paper, we spent almost one week to work on it. I never had this kind of “correction experience” before. Every time , I just wrote the essay or story really quick and then correct some grammar mistakes, that’s it. I won’t go over the essay more than twice. But for this essay, I changed 6 times. I talked to the classmates and got some very good feedback from teacher. That was really help me a lot. To be honest, I don’t think I have some very difficult parts in my essay.  Actually, I separated this essay for 3 parts by my own. The first part was grammar, second part was story parts, the third part was analysis. When I was writing, I fond that for this particular essay; the hard part was that I may not be able to catch the mistakes that are obvious to other readers.

      So, Let’s talk about the three parts at first and then talk more on my hardest part.

      In the past, I may had many grammar mistakes and spelling wrong.But because we  had the grammar quiz before, I learnt  a lot of common grammar mistakes. Such as “run on” sentence, “Comma Spices”… those was very helpful. Every time when I write the sentences, I will thinking about the grammar. So, I don’t have too many mistakes on that part.   

      For my story part, actually I write many details as much as I can. Also, when we do the group discuss. Classmates told me that I don’t need to work on my story part, because I write many details and the storyline was complete and wonderful. So, I didn’t change the story a lot. 

       For my analysis part. I just wrote few things in my first draft. And then I putted more details in my second draft and third draft. Like how I felt at that time or what I learnt for that significant moment. Finally I wrote three paragraphs for my analysis part.

       For me, the hard part of reviewing my own essays was that I may not be able to catch the mistakes that are obvious to other readers. Also, since I had the tendency to revise my writing several times, I may thought a section was perfect when in actuality it does not flow with the rest of the essay. Which means what may make sense to me may not necessarily make sense for someone else. For example, in this particular essay. My main topic was I became a independent girl until I came to America by myself. In the last two paragraphs,  I mentioned that I studied in “Cheshire academy”. In the first draft, I didn’t explain what is “Cheshire  academy”. It was just a passing comment, I didn’t go on about it. So, here is the point. The people who knows me, Like my classmates, teacher or my friends. They were know that what “cheshire academy” is . But if someone do not live in this area or even from other countries, they probably didn’t know what I was talking about. So, I needed to introduced the school a little bit and wrote more to explain that. Like that: I studied in Cheshire academy,which is a boarding school in America. If I write the sentence like that, I guess they will 100% get my point. Therefore, sometimes, we really needed  think about it from a different perspective, that might be helpful for readers to understand.

    

Significant moment draft 2

Do you have your own significant moment? What essential moment impressed you most? 
For me, A significant moment is a time that linger on my heart forever and teach me a lesson worthing to remember for a life time. I have experienced some times in my passed 18 years, but leaving my family to America for study is one that impressed me most.

I will never forget that day, September 4th, was cloudy. The sun was not embracing the earth yet while I was facing the farewell.

It was at 3 o'clock, my relatives were crowed in my room, coming to say goodbye with their best wishes. I recalled my uncles', and aunts' words that taking care of myself, and their orders"whenever I have time I shall not forget to phone them". My Mum and grandmother was picking my stuffs, medicines needed, cloths needed, food needed, as if they want to pack all my stuffs in just one luggage. Until the clock ringing at 5 o'clock, do I realized how time flies for the very first time. It was the time to actually leave my families, relatives for a period.  I knew my grandmother must had tears in her eyes, because even when I had a trip for a week, she would be sensitive. As long as I think of this, I felt a sorrow in my inner hear. Finally, I had a last farewell with them, and got in the car with the company of my Mum and Daddy. 

We left for Pudong International Airport, My Mum and Daddy kept talking all the way, but their words all centered on how to take care of myself or how to be relaxed but meanwhile study hard. However, my mind gradually goes empty, and my ears cannot hear what my Mum and Daddy was saying. I just sat and stared out of the window, thinking what a nice city was, but I was leaving. I wanted to look hard for the sceneries and had them engraved in my mind. I was haunted by the smells coming from food, I would miss the food in this city, desserts, dishes, and all kinds of food l like. It was until leaving that i miss more of what i had in this city, where I born and lived for 18 years. Suddenly, I feel someone was grabbing me and I came back from my subconscious, awaring that we are on the high-way now. My Mum grabbed me because their with a turn in the road, she was afraid my body would moved with the turn. Once again, I sense how carefully my parents treat me, not a little hurt would they let me have. My Mum started talking about once I got a burn when I was serving the food, and once I tumbled by my high heeled shoes when walking, and urged me again and again that the most important thing of studying abroad was avoiding hurt myself by accident. Listening to their words, we arrived at the airport.

My father helped me bring 2 heavy luggages to have check-in baggage, and then the check in boarding procedure. I followed him and watched. It will be the last time my father helped me doing this. From this time on, I must do these by myself, I must get used to this.

All the procedure done, I got my boarding check. I was not happy to see this card for the first time, I used to be very fresh when I have the boarding check, because was going to a new place to taste new culture. However, this time, this card was claiming that I would leave my parents official for at least months. "Hey, Jennifer"My father called me,"here is the information of JFK, here is the map of New York City, and here is the telephone number of the driver who will pick you up." I was moved again; however these I always thought was necessary for my parents to do in the past. Now, I feel these were not.

We come to the security check, it was like the border line.The moment I stepped into the line, I was leaving my parents, because they were not allowed to pass through this. My Mum hugged me and said"Go, and must must must look after myself, phone Mum and Daddy every day, tell us how you live each day". Tears falling off her eyes, I moved my sight to Daddy, he was a tough man who seldom cries, but I saw he had tears in eyes. I wanted to cry very much, but I know I can't, I must hold back my tears, or we three will cry harder. I squeezed a smile and promised them I would look after myself, eat well, study hard and phone them everyday. Then I across that "border line", not looking back. 

As soon as I passed through the security check, I burst into tears, I kept thinking of my Mum, Daddy, and grandmother. I cannot help but thinking how nice it was in my hometown. When I fell ill, my Mum would take care of me, when I wanted to travel, my father would arrange everything and go with me, when I desired a new dress, my grandmother would  instantly buy it for me, when I...Suddenly, I had a passion that give up the chance to study abroad.The only thing I want was stay with my families, even they will sometimes scold me, but now a scold will be a luxurious thing. It was the moment that I realized how willful I was in the past. I give up the intention to stay here, I shall go to America and learn how to become a independent girl even it was such a painful thing to leave.

Now, I study in Cheshire academy for almost one years. I became more independence than before. It was very important to me. Since in the past, I do not know how to washed my clothes; I do not know how to communicate with someone I didnt familiar with; I don't know how to distribute my time....Yes, you may ask me that those all are the basic skills, how can you don't know how to do it? If without that, how difficlut you are? Yes,It was a hard time for me. I learned all the stuff by my self. Actually, I was very precious for this experience. If without this expericence, I may never became independence girl.

Last but not least,this significant moment helped me to know how important family is. I learnt a lot from this experience, and I also reflected in my daily life. Few days ago, It's my father's birthday.I spent three hours to make a PowerPoint to him. I putted hundred photos in the video and sended to him. If in the past, I may just sended a message to him,or even forgot the dates. However, until I realize how important family is, I was try my best and show my love to my family members. To be honest, that's really was a good things for me and my familys. I found we are getting much closer now. I missed them so much and understand how precious they are.They are like wind in the summer, giving me cool; they are like fire in the winter, giving me warm. They treat their children with our precondition. I will cherish every moment staying with them, love them, and it will also be my turn to take care of them.

significant moment

For me, A significant moment is a time that linger on my heart forever and teach me a lesson worthing to remember for a life time. I have experienced some times in my passed 18 years, but leaving my family to America for study is one that impressed me most.

I will never forget that day, September 4th, was cloudy. The sun was not embracing the earth yet while I was facing the farewell.

It was at 3 o'clock, my relatives were crowed in my room, coming to say goodbye with their best wishes. I recalled my uncles', and aunts' words that taking care of myself, and their orders"whenever I have time I shall not forget to phone them". My Mum and grandmother was picking my stuffs, medicines needed, cloths needed, food needed, as if they want to pack all my stuffs in just one luggage. Until the clock ringing at 5 o'clock, do I realized how time flies for the very first time. It was the time to actually leave my families, relatives for a period.  I knew my grandmother must had tears in her eyes, because even when I had a trip for a week, she would be sensitive. As long as I think of this, I felt a sorrow in my inner hear. Finally, I had a last farewell with them, and got in the car with the company of my Mum and Daddy. 

We left for Pudong International Airport, My Mum and Daddy kept talking all the way, but their words all centered on how to take care of myself or how to be relaxed but meanwhile study hard. However, my mind gradually goes empty, and my ears cannot hear what my Mum and Daddy was saying. I just sat and stared out of the window, thinking what a nice city was, but I was leaving. I wanted to look hard for the sceneries and had them engraved in my mind. I was haunted by the smells coming from food, I would miss the food in this city, desserts, dishes, and all kinds of food l like. It was until leaving that i miss more of what i had in this city, where I born and lived for 18 years. Suddenly, I feel someone was grabbing me and I came back from my subconscious, awaring that we are on the high-way now. My Mum grabbed me because their with a turn in the road, she was afraid my body would moved with the turn. Once again, I sense how carefully my parents treat me, not a little hurt would they let me have. My Mum started talking about once I got a burn when I was serving the food, and once I tumbled by my high heeled shoes when walking, and urged me again and again that the most important thing of studying abroad was avoiding hurt myself by accident. Listening to their words, we arrived at the airport.

My father helped me bring 2 heavy luggages to have check-in baggage, and then the check in boarding procedure. I followed him and watched. It will be the last time my father helped me doing this. From this time on, I must do these by myself, I must get used to this.

All the procedure done, I got my boarding check. I was not happy to see this card for the first time, I used to be very fresh when I have the boarding check, because was going to a new place to taste new culture. However, this time, this card was claiming that I would leave my parents official for at least months. "Hey, Jennifer"My father called me,"here is the information of JFK, here is the map of New York City, and here is the telephone number of the driver who will pick you up." I was moved again; however these I always thought was necessary for my parents to do in the past. Now, I feel these were not.

We come to the security check, it was like the border line.The moment I stepped into the line, I was leaving my parents, because they were not allowed to pass through this. My Mum hugged me and said"Go, and must must must look after myself, phone Mum and Daddy every day, tell us how you live each day". Tears falling off her eyes, I moved my sight to Daddy, he was a tough man who seldom cries, but I saw he had tears in eyes. I wanted to cry very much, but I know I can't, I must hold back my tears, or we three will cry harder. I squeezed a smile and promised them I would look after myself, eat well, study hard and phone them everyday. Then I across that "border line", not looking back. 

As soon as I passed through the security check, I burst into tears, I kept thinking of my Mum, Daddy, and grandmother. I cannot help but thinking how nice it was in my hometown. When I fell ill, my Mum would take care of me, when I wanted to travel, my father would arrange everything and go with me, when I desired a new dress, my grandmother would  instantly buy it for me, when I...Suddenly, I had a passion that give up the chance to study abroad.The only thing I want was stay with my families, even they will sometimes scold me, but now a scold will be a luxurious thing. It was the moment that I realized how willful I was in the past. I give up the intention to stay here, I shall go to America and learn how to become a independent girl even it was such a painful thing to leave.

This significant moment helped me to know how important family is. I learnt a lot from this experience, and I also reflected in my daily life. Few days ago, It's my father's birthday.I spent three hours to make a PowerPoint to him. I putted hundred photos in the video and sended to him. If in the past, I may just sended a message to him,or even forgot the dates. However, until I realize how important family is, I was try my best and show my love to my family members. To be honest, that's really was a good things for me and my familys. I found we are getting much closer now. I missed them so much and understand how precious they are. They are like wind in the summer, giving me cool; they are like fire in the winter, giving me warm. They treat their children with our precondition. I will cherish every moment staying with them, love them, and it will also be my turn to take care of them.

Annie Dillard

The main character in this story is called Annie Dillard. In the story Annie and her friends throw iceballs to the cars that pass in front of them. They thought that was very interesting and keeping throw it. One of the cars stops and the drivers (man) gets out. He starts chasing Annie and her friends Mikey. Finally, they got tired and stopped.The man didn’t touch them, he just said a sentence: “ you stupid kids.”

She learns that process is more important than results. In the story, the men keeping chasing Annie and her friend Mikey makes them feel very nervous and a little bit afraid. However, both of them are  fully enjoy it. Even though, when the men just said that: “you stupid kids.” What’s more, she learns life needs more passion that she could have fun. Last but not least, she also learns that to be more tolerant attitudes to different people.

Annie Dillard states, "Nothing has required so much of me since as being chased all over Pittsburgh in the middle of winter – running terrified, exhausted – by this sainted, skinny, furious red-headed man who wished to have a word with us." I think this is the most great quote in this story. Since we though this sentence, we could know that the moral of her story is some experiences are worth the risk if the person enjoys the chase. She really have a great time during that period. Last, reader can experience her joy and excitement.

grammar

​As far as I am concerned, writing is a process, not a product. Mistakes are inevitable, especially for those are not English speaker. What we can do is keep practicing, improving our writing skills during the process, then, we can make the perfect product. Obviously, grammar is one of the biggest problem among people, for me, I always have some grammar mistakes in my Blogs. 

​Perhaps, the most crucial grammar problem for me is using the present participle after "to". For example, I am very glad to helping the aged people in community. The sentence mentioned before would be a nice example since it is showing a common misusing case. As can be seen, the error is obvious. The term helping is not to be put after the word to due to the nature of grammar, which is a common error frequently made by foreign English speakers. So what is the cause?

Most of the non-English speakers are easily influenced by their mother language's grammar structure as can be predicted. In Chinese language, instead altering the verb itself to make the statement concerning about something is being done, we add a word in front of the verb instead. Such a system makes Chinese English learners insensitive to the converting of the form of a verb. Therefore, it is no longer that hard to explain why this error is made. The only feasible solution to this deep-rooted problem, I would say, is to extend the range of reading in order to dive deeper into the sea of the English.

Another issue is the misemploying of the long, tough words. So many instances can be lodged so that I am not going to present them one by one. Many have made such an error since they are attempting to emphasize their English level. The problem is that most of the English learners does not fully acknowledge the proper usage of these fancy words from Webster dictionary or Barron 3500.Even in SAT tests, the only requirement for these words is the ability to define them. It is not the vocabulary that shows your mastery of English, is your capability to manipulate them. Conclusively, only use these words when you are 100% sure about how to use them.

Overall, all the errors are products of not emphasizing the priority of grammar in article-writing. Literally, If we are more alert to the grammar structure came out of the mind, most of these problems can be prevented from the root. Just be careful enough when you are composing an article. If you hold no faith on your ability, find your instructor or writing center for assistance may be a practicable solution.

References

1.http://www.usingenglish.com/articles/why-your-students-still-make-mistakes-with-grammar-they-know-well.html

Letter

Writing-3
Jennifer shen
October 1, 2014

Dear Zeus:

      How have you been lately? My name is Jennifer. I am a villager from Bruis. Actually,  I am writing this letter to thank you for saved our villages. 

      Few days ago, all the buildings in the village have been reduced to rubble because of Satan. Take me for example, Satan  killed my sheep, horses, pig; burned my houses, grain..everything was destroyed. Also, because we don’t have any food or water, my younger sister was lifeless. I was so anger and wanted to kill him as soon as possible. But  I don’t have any power to revolt. Since we are human being, we don’t have any magic. We are no match for Satan. By the way, thanks to hydra. If he didn’t tell you, I trembled to think what should happen. Could you tell him so for me. Thanks.

     What’s more, I really agree what you said to  Satan. “You don't have the right to punish people whenever you want.”. Indirectly, nobody could do whatever they want. I think Satan made a stupid decision. It was a not a good way to show his anger. Contrary, if he can be kind to everyone, I believed that no one will reprimand him. As the old saying goes : “Bad deeds, as well as good, may rebound upon the doer.”That’s why  he was punished now. 

        Again,thanks very much for your help. If you have free time, we invited you and your family are always welcome in our village. Last, Thank you for sparing your time reading my letter.

Best Regards 

Jennifer