in class writing

What did you change for Draft 2?

For draft 2, I changed five grammar mistakes,add more details and also clarify the thesis.

What do you think you need to work on for draft 3? 

For draft 3, I still have few things need to be change or improve. Such as grammar, words,syntacial structure,detail and title. 

Grammar: I will go to writing center during my free period to get some help. 

Words: I need to find stronger verb and and adjective.Like"some, really,a lot...."

Syntacial structure: selection of sentence structures and employment of rhetoric devices.

Detail: adding more details. 

Title: I have to think a attractive title.