Do you like sweet food? If yes,what's your favorite dessert? Apple pie?Doughnuts?or banana toast?
Admittedly, those desserts taste good, but If you ask me, I would definitely say chocolate cake!! It is the best dessert all over the world,and I just made my own chocolate cake yesterday. However, I failed in the first time, because the process was too confused and I didn't have any experiences before. Then,I encouraged myself and I tried once again.Guess what? I made it! !
So, I would like to show you guys how to make a delicious chocolate cake!
First, we have to list all the ingredients we need. I felt so annoyed while doing this step, because I truly had a hard time to find cocoa this time.I went to Stop&shop twice,and Hamdem once.but there was no cocoa in these two stores. Then ,my host mom drove me to New heaven,which is another town near Cheshire.Finally, I found it in an unspectacular place. Just this part,took me almost three hours to get through it. After that, everything was all set!
Then, next step was mix all the dry ingredients together.Actually I was pretty enjoyed in this step, since it reminded me the old childhood.I remember when I was little; mix all the leftover in one unwashed dishes.every time when I finished the dinner, I will
One thing I like is how the writer explained her feelings in the process of finding the ingredients. The hook is also interesting, too. It starts by asking questions to the reader, so that it makes the readers want to read the rest of the writing. I would like to hear more about why the writer thinks that chcocolate cake is the best dessert. While explaining more about this, the writer may add some of her personal experiences related to the chocolate cake. I like the organization of this writing. It starts with an introduction of what she baked, and continues with the ingredients. I think that it is well organized. In the fifth paragraph where she says "Then, next step was mix all the dry..." she can write "the next step was to mix all dry..." for the sentence to be more grammatically correct.
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