2015年1月20日星期二

in class


3: First,she puts a small amount of sand on the bottom of the pan.When the sand starts to get hot,she pours in the rice and fries them till they become a form of a pop rice.Then, she keeps them in a big gray iron box.

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 I asked my grandma to make the tasty noddles again that I eager to eat the most when she came this time

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  1. Good start. A few more revisions needed:

    First, she puts a small amount of sand on the bottom of the pan.When the sand starts to get hot,she pours in the rice and fries IT UNTIL IT becomeS a form of a pop rice.Then, she keeps IT in a big gray iron box.

    I asked my grandma to make the tasty noodles again that I WAS eager to eat the most when she VISITED this time.

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