What is the hardest part of this paper for you and why?

      For this paper, we spent almost one week to work on it. I never had this kind of “correction experience” before. Every time , I just wrote the essay or story really quick and then correct some grammar mistakes, that’s it. I won’t go over the essay more than twice. But for this essay, I changed 6 times. I talked to the classmates and got some very good feedback from teacher. That was really help me a lot. To be honest, I don’t think I have some very difficult parts in my essay.  Actually, I separated this essay for 3 parts by my own. The first part was grammar, second part was story parts, the third part was analysis. When I was writing, I fond that for this particular essay; the hard part was that I may not be able to catch the mistakes that are obvious to other readers.

      So, Let’s talk about the three parts at first and then talk more on my hardest part.

      In the past, I may had many grammar mistakes and spelling wrong.But because we  had the grammar quiz before, I learnt  a lot of common grammar mistakes. Such as “run on” sentence, “Comma Spices”… those was very helpful. Every time when I write the sentences, I will thinking about the grammar. So, I don’t have too many mistakes on that part.   

      For my story part, actually I write many details as much as I can. Also, when we do the group discuss. Classmates told me that I don’t need to work on my story part, because I write many details and the storyline was complete and wonderful. So, I didn’t change the story a lot. 

       For my analysis part. I just wrote few things in my first draft. And then I putted more details in my second draft and third draft. Like how I felt at that time or what I learnt for that significant moment. Finally I wrote three paragraphs for my analysis part.

       For me, the hard part of reviewing my own essays was that I may not be able to catch the mistakes that are obvious to other readers. Also, since I had the tendency to revise my writing several times, I may thought a section was perfect when in actuality it does not flow with the rest of the essay. Which means what may make sense to me may not necessarily make sense for someone else. For example, in this particular essay. My main topic was I became a independent girl until I came to America by myself. In the last two paragraphs,  I mentioned that I studied in “Cheshire academy”. In the first draft, I didn’t explain what is “Cheshire  academy”. It was just a passing comment, I didn’t go on about it. So, here is the point. The people who knows me, Like my classmates, teacher or my friends. They were know that what “cheshire academy” is . But if someone do not live in this area or even from other countries, they probably didn’t know what I was talking about. So, I needed to introduced the school a little bit and wrote more to explain that. Like that: I studied in Cheshire academy,which is a boarding school in America. If I write the sentence like that, I guess they will 100% get my point. Therefore, sometimes, we really needed  think about it from a different perspective, that might be helpful for readers to understand.